Angel Torres 03/14/2011

Today I learned more about sticking to the main topic of the essay and going through it the whole way. Compared to my essay, this one we worked on definitely has different elements that my essay didn't have, but there are some elements that I had in mine that the essay we worked on today didn't have. Like I had a few of my own experiences put into my essay and the one we worked on didn't, but which essay was better written probably the student example that we worked on today.